>From KAMON@heprb.physics.tamu.edu Sat Jun  2 14:41:31 2001
>Date: Thu, 24 May 2001 10:46:53 -0500
>From: KAMON@heprb.physics.tamu.edu
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>     KAMON@heprb.physics.tamu.edu
>Subject: Comments on CDF 5450 (draft PRD)
>
>Dear Ray:
>
>Our group does not have time to discuss your draft paper (CDF 5450, posted on
>May 10). So I went through the paper.  Here are stylistic comments.
>
>Teruki
>
>=======================
>
>[1] Abstract
>    Line 2: b-quark--> "b" in italic
>            85 pb-1 --> "pb-1" in \rm
>
>    MSSM is not defined.
>
	removed

>[2] Author List
>    Please make sure the latest version that includes Dave Toback.
>
	The author list includes Dave

>[3] Section 1.
>    P.2, Line 1: b-quark--> "b" in italic
>    P.2, one line before Eq.(1): "t" in italic in the MET symbol.
>
	Done


>[4] Sec. 2.5
>    Missing Et (\met) is a magnitude of the negative of ..
>                        --------------
>  
	Done

>    A "period" after "3.6"
>  
	Done

>[5] Table 1
>    b-tag --> "b" in italic
>
	Done

>
>[6] Sec. 3.1
>    \pi^{\circ} --> \pi^{0}  (to be consistent with the use on P.8- Sec.3.5)
>
	Done

>[7] Sec. 3.4 and 3.7
>    Z^0 \to e^+ e^-  --> "Z" in italic
>
	Done
>
>[8] Sec. 3.5
>    3rd line from the end of the section: \pi^{\circ} --> \pi^{0} 
>
	Done
>[9] Sec.5.1
>    Supergravity-inspired (SUGRA) models [19]
>    ---> modles inspired by supergravity (SUGRA) [19]
>
	Done

>[9] Sec.5.1.4
>    Z \to e^+ e^-  --> "Z^0" (to be consistent)
>
	Done
   
>    2nd line from the end of Sec 5.1.4: PDF --> PDFs
>
	I can't see why to pluralize here, unless you are saying that
PDF is always plural in the sense that CTEQ4L is a set of PDFs
rather than a PDF, but then I wonder why you didn't mention the other
singular uses.  I've left it as is.

>[10] Sec.5.2
>     E.M.  --> electromagnetic
>
	Done

>[11] P.36
>     efficienceis", --> efficienceis,"
>     process",      --> process,"
>
	Done

>[12] Sec. 8.1
>     the $Z$ is required ..--> "Z^0" (to be consistent)
>     the $Z$ peak
>     Which $Z$ electron
>
	Done

>[13] Sec. 8.2
>    ``W''  --> W in italic
>    Z \to e e  --> "Z^0 \to e^+ e^-" (to be consistent)
>    MRSD0' --> MRSD0$^{\prime}$ (for consistency with P.26)
>
	Done	

>[14] Table 17:
>    ``W''  --> W in italic
>
	Done

>[15] P.41
>    5th line from the bottom: ``W''  --> W in italic
>
	Done
>
>[16] Fig.11
>     the $x$ axis --> The $x$ axis
>
	Done

>     There are no model numbers in Table 19 !!
>
	I changed it to row number.


>[17] References
>     (a) missing a comma after the volume number - Ref. 1,2,4,18,21,22,30
>     (b) Ref. 1: 1999 --> (1999)
>     (c) Ref. 4: "The" D\O\ Collaboration
>     (d) Ref. 8: \eta = -ln[tan(  )]  .. use "[" and "]" and "="
>     (e) Ref. 14: Boldface for Phys. Rev "D" (for consistency)
>     (f) Ref. 18: 207-220 --> 207
>     (g) Ref. 27: Boldface for NIM "A" (for consistency with Ref.28)
>     (h) Ref. 30: 39-91 --> 39  
>     (i) Ref. 31: "comma" after \etal (or before "Proc. ...")
>     (j) Ref. 33: .. 1997, 2v.) --- What is "2v." ?
>
	Done, I recall 2v it means second volume
>
>[18] Sec. 8.3  about SHW
>     Since the SUSY/Higgs workshops, the SHW program has been used several
>     physics studies for Run II by several groups.  Is that good idea
>     to list those studies (= publication) in your paper for public awareness?
>     Let me know if you need the list.

	I feel like I have to finish this today, but this is a good idea
so please send me the list so I can include it if I get a chance to revise.